Our first draft and feedback

This is Fixation's first draft. We were planning on improving our draft a lot, and then once we received feedback we was reassured that this is what we should do. We received critical and positive feedback, but we decided to take a whole new approach to our way of editing to improve our opening by a lot. Below is our feedback:)

Here are some key words that people used when asked the question 'Think about the sound and the images- are they appropriate? Do they go together?'

People were also asked about the camera, attention to framing, variety of shot distance and angle? Close attention use of mise en scene? Below are some comments we received on this question:

-"Good angle of camera shots however could have more variety"

-"Good variety of shots, the long distance shot was done really well"

-Good camera shots, you used a wide variety"

-"The pan shots were a bit shaky and unstable"

-"There was not a large variety of shots"

-"I like the shots walking into the house"

-"Good camera angles, great mise en scene"

-"The foot shot of the group feet before the woman appears is confusing"

- "Party shot is confusing, you could have shown the 'birthday party' on the board to make it more obvious"

- "The shots are good but you could have made it clearer that there was a party by filming the '17th birthday' part of the map"